Really Good
This sounds really good and to be honest, im glad to see that making great progress.
One thing, I the instruments sound like they are meshing together in a slosh, as if they drag into eachother. I think it's because of the instruments you use. I think that if you were to get your hands onto some higher end orchestra VST's that the quality would sky rocket. Of course that would be a matter of money, so Im not going to judge you on that, I just feel it may help in the future.
Other than that, this song paints an epic seen. It brings to mind, a situation in which an event has just gone down that has brought much confusion upon a town. As the hero is in serch of his love ones he notices a small girl inside an unstable building. As the roof starts to colapse he rushes in and pushes the girl out of harms way. He manages to climb out but is injured. As he staggers about, his vision begins to blur and he notices am entity emerging from some flames. As that happens he collapses.
Great job bro, keep it up.